Essay writing: common mistakes and proposed correction

English Blog IES Consaburum: BACHILLERATO. Essay writing: common mistakes and proposed correction.:

"BUYING A MOBILE PHONE TO AN 8-YEAR-OLD, IS IT A GOOD IDEA? The mistake or un-English sentence comes first, the proposed English expression of the same idea follows: The mobile phone is more important for the people. MISTAKE Mobile phones are really important for us. PROPOSED CORRECTION You can use the mobile phone to locate somebody. You can use the mobile phone to get a hold of / stay within reach of somebody."